Haiku Chat 6 ~ Align to Re-align the great transformation
Date: 4 July 2006
Topic: This photo haiku
twilight stars emerge ~
a herd of deer re-align
their luminous spots
[N] http://www.wonderhaikuworlds.com/haikufromphoto.php?image=76
[N] twilight stars emerge ~ a herd of deer re-align their luminous spots
[N] we re-aligned this
[S] yes ~ earlier it was: a herd of deer "align"
[N] this is also two full sentence haiku which are occur less frequently
[N] early stars have appeared and we wonder what is the tale ~ a herd of deer ~ so okay ? they are re-aligning ~ what ? their luminous spots ~
[N] a deep interrelated texture of the micro and macro cosmoses are invoked
[N] it also zooms in ~ twilight stars to deer to luminous spots
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[N] re-aligning shows connections and cosmic changes a personal duty of the herd of deer
[N] whether it happens instinctively or whether they re-align themselves consciously is a mystery ~ that opens up yugen
[S] yes
[N] it is again a Karumi situation ~ a twilight and a few deer ! but the words have brought in the ku and also a very gentle invisible hai [smile]
[N] there is no mention of season and no kigo really to indicate that ~ but we roughly infer it is summer i think
[S] yes it has Karumi ~ it is a familiar observation when some members of a herd shuffle and shift about
[S] even in herds of cows or others
[N] yes
[N] it is as if the gestalt of the herd shuffles together ~ that is the beautiful thing
[S] yes true
[S] it shows they are aware of their places too not just randomly standing
[N] yes
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[N] it reads very rhythmic when read loud with the right pauses
[S] true
[N] there are secondary pauses too which could be noted in loud reading
[S] yes ~ before and after re-align there are slight pauses
[N] our chats seem to be lessons to read haiku seriously
[S] this also highlights that verb and brings out its meta echo
[N] So you read well ! exactly
[N] it was the "re-" that does it
[S] yes ~ true ~ when it was "align" earlier the pause didn't exist
[S] now there is a respite
[N] too many haiku chats a day ~ when are we going to post it
[S] we will post
[N] i am very happy about these chats
[N] they are good healthy and honest
[S] yes i'm delighted too
[S] i've read these haiku much better because of the chats
[N] yes true
[N] we are also seeing why the haiku gels wells or what is wrong
[S] yes ~ ordinarily we may notice these things unconsciously ~ but here we reflect carefully
[N] align to re-align the great transformation
[S] yes
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