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time is passing
 
Posted by Azaryuon Matin Mon, Sep 6th 2010, 04:51 :: Farsi
ساعت
ایستاده
زمان می گذرد
 
saa’at
istaada
zamaan meguzarad
English translation by Azaryuon Matin. Posted on Mon, Sep 6th 2010, 04:56
The clock
has stopped
but still time is passing

  

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Nice!

Dear Azaryuon Matin
I think a slight change in the last line is preferab le the English version. This is little pedantic perhaps! I leave it open to your choice.

The clock
has stopped
but still time is passing

TO

The clock
has stopped
but still time passes on
Narayanan Raghunathan Tue, Sep 7th 2010, 01:24  
  

Thanks Narayanan for your nice comment. The second version looks better!
Azaryuon Matin Fri, Sep 10th 2010, 01:57  
  
Good one Azaryoun ~
Shyam Santhanam Fri, Sep 10th 2010, 22:50  
  
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