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waterfall
 
Posted by Maria Tirenescu Thu, Aug 14th 2008, 01:53 :: English

big noise of waterfall

audible from a distance –

the evening walk  

Romanian translation by Maria Tirenescu. Posted on Thu, Aug 14th 2008, 01:54

sunetul cascadei

se aude din departare –

plimbare de seara

English translation by Rebba Singh. Posted on Fri, Aug 15th 2008, 07:53

jharne ka shor

dur se sunai de -

shaam ka ttaehalna 


  


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Maria, the verb "listens" is inappropriate in this context. Checking, the Romanian, the following possible versions suggested to me

big noise of waterfall
resounds from a distance –
the evening walk

big noise of waterfall
audible from a distance –
the evening walk

big noise of waterfall
echoes from a distance –
the evening walk

Narayanan Raghunathan Thu, Aug 14th 2008, 02:10  
  

Thank you, Narayanan! I learn...
Maria Tirenescu Thu, Aug 14th 2008, 02:12  
  

I endorse Narayanan's insight into this one, Maria! We are lucky to have such positive criticism!
Keith A. Simmonds Sat, Aug 16th 2008, 04:00  
  

I have the luck and the bosom friends. Thank you!
Maria Tirenescu Mon, Aug 18th 2008, 15:14  
  

Thank you, Rebba, for the translation!
Maria Tirenescu Mon, Aug 18th 2008, 15:41  
  

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