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Calicut street scene
flock of doves
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| Posted by Nanda Kumar Thu, Aug 14th 2008, 05:50 :: English | |||
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little muslim girls in light blue head-dress~ like a flock of doves |
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| Swedish translation by Nanda Kumar. Posted on Thu, Aug 14th 2008, 05:52 | |||
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Calicut gatuscen: | Små muslimska flickor i lättblå huvuddräkt~ som en samling duvar |
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| Hindi translation by Rebba Singh. Posted on Fri, Aug 15th 2008, 06:22 | |||
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nanhi muslim lardkiaan aasamaani nakaab mein~ faakhtaaon ka jhund |
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The use of "like" seems not necessary[is implicit] here after the pause! Perhaps,you included it to add inner assonance a "la-kara prayogam" [ a technique related to sound "la"(L)] ! Yes it works well and the word "like" seems essential from a poet's perspective ~
Who said a haiku should not sound good ?
li lim
li lu
li lo
NNarayanan, a good thought; it will be good to have a Haiku sound good!
little muslim girls
in light blue head-dress:
a flock of doves
But this is a great piece, nonetheless!