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Down By The Black Brook
Black Brook Haibun 
Posted by Little Onion Sun, Mar 12th 2006, 03:41 :: English


Down by the Black Brook we find signs of spring.

New shoots on the hawthorn but not yet any blossom.

A few minnows in amongst the coke cans. 

And here in the shelter of a willow, is it some child's den?

a damp mattress
scattered with needles
the coot's legs
.
Little Onion
Haiku first posted on UKKU's Spring Blog March 2006. Complete haibun first posted on Little Onion's blog Skin After Skin.

  


Comments
how poignant!
cato Fri, Mar 17th 2006, 07:43  
  

Thanks for this lovely Haibun little onion.
Narayanan Raghunathan Tue, Apr 4th 2006, 18:55  
  

We have a native saying. The more you peel an onion, the less you have. The little onion, in this case, seems to grow.
Prithviraj Bhaskar Shankar Fri, Jun 23rd 2006, 16:31  
  

Dear Little Onion,

The child's den, so evocative, and how a damp mattress might have been a castle even. I shudder to think what the needles are, but it's a sign of the times I suppose.
Alan Summers Sun, Oct 1st 2006, 16:41  
  

Dear Little Onion,

The child's den, so evocative, and how a damp mattress might have been a castle even. I shudder to think what the needles are, but it's a sign of the times I suppose.
Alan Summers Sun, Oct 1st 2006, 16:44  
  

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